by Red WolfLike everyone else, I'd heard the stories most of my life. They were the adult equivalent of cautionary fairy tales — If you're not careful the razor girls will get you. Aside from the name, the only thing that all the tales agreed on was that the girls were scary and to be avoided. I'd always shrugged the idea off as urban legend until I saw one on the bus.
I was sitting up the back of the bus that morning, as far as possible from the harried looking young woman in the business suit with the obnoxious child that insisted on singing some bloody song about ducks — over and over. It was getting to the point where, if I heard mention of one more duck, the evil little troll would be hanging from the roof by her hair.
The hand movement of a passenger a couple of seats down from me caught my eye. A blend of impatient finger drumming and clenched fisted frustration, it mirrored my own, aside from the choice of jewellery. The tip of each of the girl's fingers was bisected by a razorblade and every movement of her fingers was slowly shredding the bus seat. There were other passengers that could plainly see the girl carving up public transportation property, but no one other than me seemed to be noticing her.
Someone at the front of the bus signalled the driver. As the bus approached the next stop, the razor girl stood and made her way to the door. As she passed the still caterwauling youngster, the girl waved her hand over the child's head, neatly severing the mini beast's neatly plaited pigtails. I burst into laughter. The razor girl turned back to me and winked, then in a flash of perfect metallic blue hair and platform sneakers, she was gone.
The moment the bus doors closed, the shorn child broke into tears, her mother comforting her and asking what happened to her hair.
The next time I happened to see a razor girl was on the platform just before my train was due. This girl was dressed in flowing black velvet and had scalpel blades in her fingers. She slipped through the crowd of commuters with ease, leaving me to battle my through in her wake. As I finally caught up with her, I saw a teenager attempting to rifle through the handbag of an impatient and distracted woman. Before he could withdraw his hand from the purse, the razor girl had slit his throat and moved on.
Last month I saw a woman in a pin striped power suit with straight razors attached to one hand. Two days ago a sailor suited schoolgirl, looking like a Japanese businessman's wet dream, wiggled her sharply tipped fingers at me in greeting as she giggled behind her other hand.
Today I'm walking through the pre-holiday shopping crowds; people are not getting in my way as much as they usually do, appearing to move out of my way as I reach them.
I catch a glimmer of reflected light on metal from the corner of my eye and turn to see a tall girl in white leather. She glides through the shoppers to my side and gently taking my hand in her lethal grip, leads me away from the masses. In my backpack is a box of number 23 scalpel blades. They'll fit nicely in the slits that have started to form in the tips of the fingers on my left hand.
Published Babble Horde — 26.11.2003
Published deviantART — 27.01.2004
Published FictionPress — 18.02.2004
Published nFiction — 24.05.2004
Published Wrasp.Net — 01.01.2005
Uhh... I'm scared now. Okay, I post a funny snippet about Volvos and Volkswagons — and you write this?! ::shudder:: — via Live Journal
— posted by Moonbeam at 31.12.2003 19:52 AEST | 
It came to me last night — via Live Journal
— posted by Red Wolf at 31.12.2003 19:53 AEST | 
Hi! This has nothing to do with your post, but I wanted to invite you to pryde_wisdom. I noticed on your interests that you listed Pete Wisdom. That's why I'm leaving a message. :) We're trying to gather all of the fans of the two chars into one place. I hope that you'll join us. :) — via Live Journal
— posted by Jen the Fangirl at 31.12.2003 19:56 AEST | 
Very moody....
Kinda got a bit confused....but everything packages nicely as we get to the end.
Good Shit — via deviantART — posted by OrganicJerk at 27.01.2004 21:11 AEST |
Kinda got a bit confused....but everything packages nicely as we get to the end.
Good Shit — via deviantART — posted by OrganicJerk at 27.01.2004 21:11 AEST |
Thanks for the comments, I appreciate them. I'll have to give it another run through to clear up some of the confusion — via deviantART
— posted by Red Wolf at 27.01.2004 21:11 AEST | 
You know what. You have real talent. Keep up the great work — via FictionPress
— posted by someone that hurts at 18.02.2004 22:25 AEST | 
its so cool!! i love it =^) it's hell creepy, where'd u get the idea from? love it again =^.^= — via FictionPress
— posted by chainedfreedom at 19.02.2004 14:11 AEST | 
extrodinary, you have a talent that's for damn sure — via FictionPress
— posted by oneofakind3641 at 20.02.2004 13:19 AEST | 
Wow great story. You could even continue with it — via FictionPress
— posted by dazedconfusion at 20.02.2004 13:20 AEST | 
Very well written, and very short, and disturbing! I liked this, because you have a knack for disturbing stories, which are eerie. Very good story! — via FictionPress
— posted by Whispers In Silence at 29.02.2004 21:55 AEST | 
For some reason, I happened to stumble across this, and I just had to comment. I laughed out loud when I read the other review. But Volvos and Volkswagons are so *boring*.
I liked the story very much. Perhaps it clicked with my twisted mind or suited my dark humor; either way, I thought it was wonderfully wicked and disturbing.
*shakes head* Normal people just wouldn't understand — via LiveJournal — posted by Dawn S at 27.03.2004 19:56 AEST |
I liked the story very much. Perhaps it clicked with my twisted mind or suited my dark humor; either way, I thought it was wonderfully wicked and disturbing.
*shakes head* Normal people just wouldn't understand — via LiveJournal — posted by Dawn S at 27.03.2004 19:56 AEST |
I wouldn't take Moonbeam's review as a sign of a disgruntled reader. We're mates from way back and have a similar shit-stirring approach to life.
I like disturbing. Disturbing is a good thing. I'm glad you enjoyed it — via LiveJournal — posted by Red Wolf at 27.03.2004 19:58 AEST |
I like disturbing. Disturbing is a good thing. I'm glad you enjoyed it — via LiveJournal — posted by Red Wolf at 27.03.2004 19:58 AEST |
Originality/Concept: 10
Grammar/Style: 8
Overall Rating: 9
A very nicely done story. Highly original and very well written. Your style is impeccable and your ending perfect. I would, however, love to see a full-blown story formed out of this. It'd also do very well as a movie. Some stuff for you to chew on. Great job, Red Wolf — via Wrasp.Net — posted by Sean Chase at 14.01.2005 14:32 AEST |
Grammar/Style: 8
Overall Rating: 9
A very nicely done story. Highly original and very well written. Your style is impeccable and your ending perfect. I would, however, love to see a full-blown story formed out of this. It'd also do very well as a movie. Some stuff for you to chew on. Great job, Red Wolf — via Wrasp.Net — posted by Sean Chase at 14.01.2005 14:32 AEST |
Originality/Concept: 8
Grammar/Style: 9
Overall Rating: 8
Well written, I don't know quite how to react to it, but I like. It reminds me of Candyman sort of... but then again, this late into literature in our history and everything reminds someone of something else.
I liked it, and I liked the fact that there was a mystery to it as to what the purpose of the razor girls were and such — via Wrasp.Net — posted by Michæl Carey at 14.01.2005 14:44 AEST |
Grammar/Style: 9
Overall Rating: 8
Well written, I don't know quite how to react to it, but I like. It reminds me of Candyman sort of... but then again, this late into literature in our history and everything reminds someone of something else.
I liked it, and I liked the fact that there was a mystery to it as to what the purpose of the razor girls were and such — via Wrasp.Net — posted by Michæl Carey at 14.01.2005 14:44 AEST |
Originality/Concept: 10
Grammar/Style: 9
Overall Rating: 8
Originality: Sounds like Razor Girls could be kick ass. Sounds demonic.
Grammar/Style: I guess I could mention this. Your style seems a bit repetitive in some of your stories, or ficlets. Same stuff. Hope this doesn't discourage you at all. Were all here to help, right?
Overall: I feel its going be an interesting story with the Razor girls. I have nothing else to say — via Wrasp.Net — posted by Will at 14.01.2005 14:54 AEST |
Grammar/Style: 9
Overall Rating: 8
Originality: Sounds like Razor Girls could be kick ass. Sounds demonic.
Grammar/Style: I guess I could mention this. Your style seems a bit repetitive in some of your stories, or ficlets. Same stuff. Hope this doesn't discourage you at all. Were all here to help, right?
Overall: I feel its going be an interesting story with the Razor girls. I have nothing else to say — via Wrasp.Net — posted by Will at 14.01.2005 14:54 AEST |
Originality/Concept: 8
Grammar/Style: 10
Overall Rating: 9
great story, but the ending sorta confused me. Where did the slits come from? I really like this story but the ending could use some fixing up. if you want you can read my story, I'M DEAD. i've been writing for a short while and I'M DEAD is my second story ever created, so it kind of sucks. the next few stories I'll put up are already writen. I encourage you to join fictionpress.com — via Wrasp.net — posted by man_on_the_moon at 17.01.2005 10:04 AEST |
Grammar/Style: 10
Overall Rating: 9
great story, but the ending sorta confused me. Where did the slits come from? I really like this story but the ending could use some fixing up. if you want you can read my story, I'M DEAD. i've been writing for a short while and I'M DEAD is my second story ever created, so it kind of sucks. the next few stories I'll put up are already writen. I encourage you to join fictionpress.com — via Wrasp.net — posted by man_on_the_moon at 17.01.2005 10:04 AEST |
Originality/Concept: 9
Grammar/Style: 8
Overall Rating: 8
Interesting concept, though I thought it could use a little more...something... Is this something you came up with or something that you heard and are turning into a story? Not sure really.
So, I'm not really sure what to say about this. You descriptions were nice, though I noticed a couple of missing words I think — via Wrasp.net — posted by Lani Lenore at 07.02.2005 14:26 AEST |
Grammar/Style: 8
Overall Rating: 8
Interesting concept, though I thought it could use a little more...something... Is this something you came up with or something that you heard and are turning into a story? Not sure really.
So, I'm not really sure what to say about this. You descriptions were nice, though I noticed a couple of missing words I think — via Wrasp.net — posted by Lani Lenore at 07.02.2005 14:26 AEST |
Originality/Concept: 8
Grammar/Style: 7
Overall Rating: 7
Razor Girls is a quality concept. Very original and please accept my kudos. However, I got lost on why the character became a razor girl. Means to cope with life and pressures? Allure or attraction of the razor girls? Something else altogether? On a personal note, I get squeamish with kids involved in any manner — via Wrasp.net — posted by RadioWriter at 26.03.2005 18:09 AEST |
Grammar/Style: 7
Overall Rating: 7
Razor Girls is a quality concept. Very original and please accept my kudos. However, I got lost on why the character became a razor girl. Means to cope with life and pressures? Allure or attraction of the razor girls? Something else altogether? On a personal note, I get squeamish with kids involved in any manner — via Wrasp.net — posted by RadioWriter at 26.03.2005 18:09 AEST |
Originality/Concept: 8
Grammar/Style: 8
Overall Rating: 8
Interesting concept of the razor girls, and how they keep showing up more and more, and how they seem to have their own view of justice. It's very interesting, but they don't seem to hurt people who don't do anything, but any sort of public menace they seem to attack. I like it — via Wrasp.net — posted by Teagan at 09.06.2005 20:28 AEST |
Grammar/Style: 8
Overall Rating: 8
Interesting concept of the razor girls, and how they keep showing up more and more, and how they seem to have their own view of justice. It's very interesting, but they don't seem to hurt people who don't do anything, but any sort of public menace they seem to attack. I like it — via Wrasp.net — posted by Teagan at 09.06.2005 20:28 AEST |
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